Date: Fri, 02 May 1997 10:51:20 -0700
From: Socha <347hqx7-AT-cmuvm.csv.cmich.edu>
Subject: MB: villanelle


Would someone care to critique/respond to this poem?  Has the writer
stolen too much from MB?  Has she left out anything crucial to MB's
superior insight?  What might be added/subtracted?

The Eyes of Orpheus

His eyes must remain music for her to follow
the careless, innocent dance that brought him to her
trusting songs of absent desire to invite her shadow.

Because of all she is, she must not be sought as known.
For the night to open as if every other were blurred,
his eyes must remain music for her to follow

drawn by a careless absence recognized as her own
in his attempts to seek without capturing her features;
trusting that songs of absent desire invite her shadow.

If he's beautiful enough not to know what's been undone,
while refusing both panic and doubt in complete surrender,
his eyes remaining music for her to follow,

she'll feel in him all he'd ever want in turning to know:
his dumb luck in leading her from these embers,
trusting songs of absent desire to invite her shadow.

Planning their future by losing their past below,
forgetting his need to remember anything forgotten there,
his eyes must remain music for her to follow,
trusting songs of absent desire to invite her shadow.

	Any more appropriate spaces this might be submitted?  Any questions? 
Comments?

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Exploring the subject's situation in the world as it relates to the
Other, entre le loup Lacan et le chien modernism,
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Don Socha