Date: Fri, 20 Feb 2004 15:01:48 -0500
From: "A. Periale" <perryalley-AT-rscs.net>
Subject: PUPT: PI #15


Dear John,

Thanks for getting us some stuff at the last minute. I'm sure your
schedule is as crazy as ours.

Have just finished going through "Puppets Appear, Disappear, Re-Appear",
which fits in well with our theme, and brings together some unlikely
characters (like Rama and Triumph the Insult Comic Dog). There was only
one thing which broke my concentration, namely:

"Maybe the point is that if puppeteers persist in thinking that there's
something important about their live puppet shows, the work will
continue, and (eventually?) find an audience. "

The more I read this, the more sense it made to me, but I think my
initial reaction of "Huh?" was because it sound like this was the point
Ravi was trying to make, rather a larger lesson. Would the sentence be
better beginning:

Maybe the lesson for us is that . . . .

or

Maybe the larger point is that . . .

I have no problem tweaking for grammar, clarity or readability (or even
complete rewrites for the semiliterate), but you are literate, and I
want to make sure that I got your meaning.

Andrew



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