Date: Tue, 15 Jul 1997 21:50:40 -0500 (CDT)
Subject: Re: "Aquestion of balance"


Hello, again!

Thank you all so much for appreciating my poem...now, I'm going to bore 
you with it again (  :)  !)...I've revised it, and like it better...let 
me know if you do...and if you more than dabble in meter, I'm eager to 
learn from you where to improve my verse...I simply write for the 
sounds and the mental images I see to add atmosphere...here's my 
revision:

My Children
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My loves are many.

Baby in my mind's eye
wears blue-black curls
like a halo 
her hands grasp mine 
trusting I won't let go
our dreams.

A father unable to bear
gut-wrenching cries
nearly steps off Delhi-bound train 
eyes tearful from smoke
to the five-year-old's
"Don't go! Don't go!"
grateful that separation
can become gossamer memory
chasing humming birds
in her grandmother's garden.

Devi, Goddess Mother, protects 
her charges, a delicate mind,
a flowering bloom.

And my First and Only Love
without whom nothing.

     ***

July 14, 1997
Revised, 07/15/97